There Are Genetic Limitations-Which Are Real-To What Can Be Learned-By Some: From: Miss. Bayo E. Cary, AA, BA, MLIS Discussion Group
10-20-2017
Unit 2 Discussion 2 Evelyn Davis
Response Required
Response From: Miss. Bayo Elizabeth Cary, AA, BA, MLIS
“In the past every employee has had the right to send a personal e-mail occasionally, but he must use that right carefully.”
“In the Past,” The second part of the sentence is not gender neutral.
“We don’t want to prohibit the personal use of e-mail entirely.” ”do not”
“We have now found it necessary to amplify and extrapolate that policy to include use of the Internet.” “the use”
“You must return this form by March 1.” “March 1st “ The word "please" should be used instead of "You must"
“Effective immediately a new policy must be implemented.” “will be” or “shall be”
This email could have been gender neutral throughout. This email was also condescending. "You boys and girls" could have been left out because the comment is insulting.
Response From: Miss. Bayo Elizabeth Cary, AA, BA, MLIS
It was my impression, that the instructions for the above presented class assignment, was to provide, a more in depth ananlysis, of how the email communications, should be re-written. The commentary, in regards to the writing sample-provides only a little insight, as why specifically, the email, needs to be re-written. I understand,the implications, of what has been stated-in your narative response, to the writing sample, however-I would ask, based on the class discussion assignment, that you elaborate, and add more extensive opinion, to your responses: "why."
One of the most important aspects, of graduate level university study, is communicating, through writing. Research, must be based, on what is important to the student, for the education to be relevant, and applicable. Exercises, in writing, are utilized, to connect an individuals personal experiences, to their current field of study and-to recognize, that people have important and meaningful experiences, which are relevant, to what field of employment is choosen: "I am Somebody"--Jesse Jackson, i.e.: "I Matter:"
In this version, the student was asked to think about himself
as a representative case and to write about the forces that shaped a
young person’s life here and now—in the United States in 2010. (The
prompt was framed by Kwame Anthony Appiah’s “Race, Culture,
Identity: Misunderstood Connections.”) (Bartholomae, n.d., p. 25)
Professional writing, should cause as little offense as possible. However, when issuing an email communication, memo, or any other writing communication, in an office setting-the problem that is being discussed, has to be mentioned, and then-elaborated on. When employees, are soo sentitive, that they cannot handle, and constructive criticism, then, at that point-the employee, is not functional enough, to be employed. No work environment will ever be perfect, and the roblems that arrise-must be fully discussed, to work towards a resolution.
References
Bartholomae, David (n.d.). Teacher Teacher: Poirier and Coles on Writing. RARITAN, p. 25-53.
Unit 2 Discussion 2 Evelyn Davis
Response Required
Response From: Miss. Bayo Elizabeth Cary, AA, BA, MLIS
“In the past every employee has had the right to send a personal e-mail occasionally, but he must use that right carefully.”
“In the Past,” The second part of the sentence is not gender neutral.
“We don’t want to prohibit the personal use of e-mail entirely.” ”do not”
“We have now found it necessary to amplify and extrapolate that policy to include use of the Internet.” “the use”
“You must return this form by March 1.” “March 1st “ The word "please" should be used instead of "You must"
“Effective immediately a new policy must be implemented.” “will be” or “shall be”
This email could have been gender neutral throughout. This email was also condescending. "You boys and girls" could have been left out because the comment is insulting.
Response From: Miss. Bayo Elizabeth Cary, AA, BA, MLIS
It was my impression, that the instructions for the above presented class assignment, was to provide, a more in depth ananlysis, of how the email communications, should be re-written. The commentary, in regards to the writing sample-provides only a little insight, as why specifically, the email, needs to be re-written. I understand,the implications, of what has been stated-in your narative response, to the writing sample, however-I would ask, based on the class discussion assignment, that you elaborate, and add more extensive opinion, to your responses: "why."
One of the most important aspects, of graduate level university study, is communicating, through writing. Research, must be based, on what is important to the student, for the education to be relevant, and applicable. Exercises, in writing, are utilized, to connect an individuals personal experiences, to their current field of study and-to recognize, that people have important and meaningful experiences, which are relevant, to what field of employment is choosen: "I am Somebody"--Jesse Jackson, i.e.: "I Matter:"
In this version, the student was asked to think about himself
as a representative case and to write about the forces that shaped a
young person’s life here and now—in the United States in 2010. (The
prompt was framed by Kwame Anthony Appiah’s “Race, Culture,
Identity: Misunderstood Connections.”) (Bartholomae, n.d., p. 25)
Professional writing, should cause as little offense as possible. However, when issuing an email communication, memo, or any other writing communication, in an office setting-the problem that is being discussed, has to be mentioned, and then-elaborated on. When employees, are soo sentitive, that they cannot handle, and constructive criticism, then, at that point-the employee, is not functional enough, to be employed. No work environment will ever be perfect, and the roblems that arrise-must be fully discussed, to work towards a resolution.
References
Bartholomae, David (n.d.). Teacher Teacher: Poirier and Coles on Writing. RARITAN, p. 25-53.
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